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so the same friend who left me to do OUR project alone, teamed up with me and he cannot write. im just saying he cannot, hes great with history and essays but the man cannot write a story. so i came up with the characters and blah blah blah. then he walks up to me and asks "hey you wanna work together?" and im like sure why not? then he says he's the writer now and i become the editor. i can live with it hes has and over inflated ego and i didn't really care. but the problem with that is that, he cant write. he sends me the rough draft i read through it and there are SO MANY PLOT HOLES. i couldn't even follow it. the characters are flat and boring and not engaging at all. so im essentially rewriting the whole thing so we don't make a complete fool of ourselves. i want to break my bed and jump in some lava on hardcore mode. this is for a grade by the way. also a contest which i don't really care about. qwertyuiopasdfghjkllzxcvbnm you can read it here The morning air was cold, this morning marks Shyr’s third year in Sigma Prison. Bavf gave no food to the inmates. The hunger reminds her of how she got in here in the first place. You see Tacus is a totalitaristic planet, the littlest thing would get you sent to Sigma for life. So when a cold and hungry Shyr stole some food they were on her immediately. She was caught and was locked up for good, or so they thought. Shyr started hitting the walls with her second punch she knocked out a sheet of metal and found an open vent behind it. As she crawled through the vent she looked through a slitted opening and saw warden Bavf standing guard over a glove shyr thought to herself ”that must be very important to the warden for him to guard it. With haste she burst through the vent and prepared for battle the warden pulled out his gun,Flash freeze, a weapon with the ability to freeze anything that it points at she saw the gun and dawned the gauntlet as the great robot warden attempted to fire she rushed at him with the determination of a woman possessed with fear then he shot there was nothing she could do but then the glove moved on its own deflecting the shot, she wasted no time in stabbing Bavf sparks fly and the robot falls her strike hit his battery. Shyr heard footsteps approaching the room she moved to flee but she saw that the hand of the gauntlet turned blue precios time was wasted and the enemy was upon her she moved her hand to block a laser but the lazer missed and the gauntlet shot the a flash freeze seeing the men where dead Shyr made her escape back into the vent and eventually found a stream from an underground hot spring she slipped in and was knocked out. Five days later shyr woke in a bed there was a man beside her she asked who he is he said his name was philipios she asked where they where he told her that they where in tau the land of islands as Shyr got up to leave he asked her name she told him my friends call me Shyr Terror.
- Published February 04, 2020, 17:06
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